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The sun set on the horizon, leaving after it the darkness. The stars appeared through slight mist, looking out for their worshippers. The air was filled with silence - unbreakable silence. The wind stopped its billowing and the mist began dying into the ground, leaving small patches of condensation on the hoary floor.

The distraught land wept continuous tears, deluging each day. No sun would emerge unaccompanied. Little life was apparent to the kingdom. Humans themselves had died out, warring over gold, their greed was their death. Ogres left the land untouched; even for them the land had an evil presence, one that even a gaunt finger would not dare touch, due to it would most likely meet it’s maker again.

The land cried to be loved, it needed good. That is how things used to function in the world of Curet. The kingdom was filled with love, passion and temples to the god of nature. But now; the land might as well be dead along with its rulers.

The land started to rumble, the sorrowful mourning began and the mist was released from the patches of condensation. Loud clutters of shields on swords approached. Stomps of powerful feet, and crushing of bones filled the silence, expanding it until no longer would it fit inside. The silence exploded with a bang of a drum.

A smell worse than death approached along with the noise; flames tore up the sides of banners picturing flames crossing over a skull. The smell of burning ogre gave way to the outburst of howling winds, sweeping dust clouds all over the terrain, creeping over the rivers, dispersing into the eyes of soldiers, whom were getting closer with every bang of the drum.

A single ruined farm building lay in the way of the army approaching and the sheer evil tore it from the land and swept it past the army. Any remaining plants of life died, shrivelled into the small pockets of the darkness.

The evil of the approaching army froze a path into the landscape. The path was made of ice and could only be touched by those wearing leather boots crafted at the edge of a volcano that had destroyed a whole city. Every part of the evil was made perfect, even the sneers of the individual soldiers made the air cry for help, howling like a wolf at midnight on a terror-stricken full moon.

The army drew a line of deceit from their feet, marking the ground for ever. They cared not of the lies they told, they cared not for the trouble they caused and they cared for nothing. They lived in deceit; they loved to dig new lies in already corrupt soil.
©2006-2009 ~silence-forgotten
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This i wrote like 3 months ago and i have just re-read it...i have decided to put it up and would like to move forward with it but i would like some critque (in a nice way to not make me feel to bad) because thats the only way i can make it better an dmove on.
Thanks. It is just the beginning of a chapter you could say...

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:iconrushmantic:
Incredible imagery. Beautifully written. Nice job :) It kept my attention and I am intrigued :D
:iconshealiny:
Very impressive ! You are really gifted with the desciption of things. Nice style, very dark :). Please go on, you're doing some great work :)

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thanks, i was hoping for a dark sort of atmosphere, will keep going

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it's wonderful! i love the word usage, you have a beautiful writing style, the only thing i would say is that when it says 'silence, unbreakable silence' you might use a semicolon rather than a comma, and you spelled 'dying' wrong, but other than that it's incredible! i love it because the style is so smooth, it flows very cleanly, almost like it's a cloud rolling off the tongue, i could barely concentrate on what it was saying because i was so lost in the sound of it, it's exquisite! keep writing, it's a winner! :D :bow:

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thanks, i sometimes have a stupid spelling spree which i usually try and correct but it obviously slipped out of my view. Thanks for telling me to put a ; makes a lot more sense now. Thanks for such a wonderful comment

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no problem, are you planning on being published some day? you should really think about it if you arent, you obviously have a lot of talent :D

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:bulletblue: from the one the only, Smiley Artiste :bulletblue:
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published? really? that really is a thought i may think about...maybe a published book could get me through uni in a few years time lol, i will have to finish a book first though lol

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xD it would be easier money than a job at k-mart lolz

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Extreme! :headbang: That's a wicked prose!

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